The judges daughter

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( I have read so many gd fanfictions so i decided to have a go my self tel lme what u think)

As Lucy set of to school on the first day of term she had a weird feeling like today was going to be one of the best days ever. She got her usual cloths on for school black skinny’s and her mouldy school top as she walked out the door her mum shouted “don’t for get your toast” so Lucy grabbed her toast and shoved it in the outside bin “god ill never get a boyfriend eating all the crap she feeds me”. Lucy walked straight past the bus stop as she usually did on the first day of term being late was kinder her tradition. As she turned the corner she saw some one walking towards her probably going to catch the school bus she thought as he got closer she looked straight at him straight into his sea blue eyes at this point she was so lost in them she didn’t notice he was also staring at her another thing she didn’t notice was the lamp post that was in front of her well she did notice it but only as she walked into it and landed on the floor. The mysteries boy walked up to her and said “hi you alright im frank by the way but every one calls me Trè cool as in very cool in French” Lucy stood up her face was bright red with embarrassment “um hi im Lucy just plain Lucy and can we like pretend that like never happened I was just like a little lost” “what in my eyes I saw you looking” “ um no its just iv only just moved to this um town” just as she said this one of the kid’s from school walked past and said “hi Lucy good to see you again missed you since last term” Lucy turned around and went bright red again “oh your new in town are you well I ll have to show you the way to the bus stop and I only got here a week ago” Lucy quickly jumped in !”I no were the bus stop is but I never get on the bus the first day of term” Trè looked at her and started to walk to the bus stop but just as the bus pulled up he decided to catch up with Lucy who had started to walk off again. “do you mind if I walk with you yknow like first day of school don’t know anyone” Trè asked , Lucy looked back into his blue eyes and found her self lost again all of a sudden Trè steered her round another lamp post. “ Lucy do you mind not gazing into my eyes like a lost sheep staring at food” “oh god is it really that obvious” “um yer u already walked into a lamp post and I just stopped you from doing it again”
“oh um well wear some sun glasses and I wont be staring” “ you make me laugh I will then tomorrow it will look a bit odd though if its raining” said Trè laughing. Lucy and Trè talked all the way to school about music and what instruments they played when Lucy stopped and shouted “shit” Trè stopped and looked at her with a looked that said what and Lucy looked at him and then quickly looked a way and said “ iv got music today and forgot my new strat” Trè looked at Lucy “do you wanna go back and get it I don’t mind we can think of An excuse why were extremely late on the way back” so Lucy and Trè walked all the way back to Lucy’s house. Lucy quickly ran inside grabbed her strat shoved it in the case grabbed her amp and ran out the door. Trè grabbed the amp off her and ask what she needed it for wouldn’t they have them at school , “yer they have them at school but there not as good as mine which happens to be a marshal so there you go “ As the pair neared school Trè turned to Lucy and said right you fell over and twisted your ankle so I had to help you walk to school and that is the reason were late is that an ok excuse” “ why is it me that has to fall over why not you” Trè looked at her and said “ have you seen the size of you like you wouldn’t be able to support me even if you had I dunno 6 more stone on you”

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next part i no tre didnt meet mike untill like years later but who cares its not real!!!!!!!!!!!!

Pt 2
Trè and Lucy walked in to school went to reception to sign in the receptionist says “Lucy late as all ways on the first day back but later then usual do u have and excuse”
“Yer she twisted her ankle on the way to school and I was helping her limp to school” Trè butted in. The receptionist looked at Trè and said “and you are sorry for asking but I kinder get to know the names of all the people that are late and I haven’t seen you in reception before” Trè looked at Lucy “im new here so yer that would be the reason for you not seeing me before and you wont recognise me next time you see me either because I dye my hair a different colour every week” Trè said pointing to his bright green hair. Trè and Lucy walked out of reception laughing at the receptionists’ face. Trè went in his bag and pulled out his time table “oh for fuck sake what a lesson to have first” Lucy looked at Trè and didn’t bother asking. Lucy started to walk towards French and Trè followed, Lucy turned around “will you quit following me” Trè looked confused “im not following you I have French next to”.

About an hour later
“omg I hate French do you think I can like bunk it from now on” Lucy looked at Trè and just gave him a small shake of the head and said “Trè you just got to this school and your already planning t bunk of lessons you bad man I only bunk one lesson and that is pe” Trè looked at Lucy he looked like he was going to say some thing but just laughed instead.
“so what lesson you got now frank” Trè turned around gave her a dodgy look and ignored her “ok then what lesson you got now Trè is that better” Trè turned a round with a smile on his face “yes that is better and I got music they do have a drum kit here don’t they I don’t really want to cart my drum kit to school every time iv got music” Lucy laughed and turned to Trè were she again got lost in his eyes she quickly shook her head to get out of the trance “yes they have a drum kit” So the pair walked off towards music as they walked into the class room Lucy sat in her usual place next to two of her best friends and Trè sat across the class room from her. Throughout half of the lesson the pair pulled faces at each other from across the class room they did this until the teacher said they could go and start making there exam pieces. Trè sat next to Lucy and started strumming on her guitar “I was alone I was all by my self no one was looking I was thinking of you and yer did I mention I was all by myself….” “Ok ok don’t embarrass me” Trè just laughed. “Did you write that song yourself then Trè” “yer I did why do you like it” Lucy sat there and thought for a bit then said “ yer its alright it’s a bit cheesy though”. The two sat there for the whole lesson trying to agree on what song to learn “ I want to do Elvis Costello alison” “yer well I wanna do a clash song “ Lucy argued back in the end they both decided on Elvis Costello” by the end of the lesson Trè had learned the drum beat and Lucy had nearly got the hang of the guitar. All of a sudden the music teacher came into Lucy and Trè practise room and said “um I hope you don’t mind but we have a new late student and seems there are only two of you in this group can he join this group I think he plays bass and there is a new kid coming next lesson who will also be in this group”. As the teacher walked out in walked a tall skinny boy with dirty blonde hair “im mike Pritchard” “hi mike im Lucy and this is …” “IM TRE” “hi Lucy and hi um Trè that isn’t your real name is it” “no my real name is frank but everyone in my band calls me Trè cool as in very cool in French” The tree chatted until the end of the lesson which was only about two minuets.

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yer this is prob the longest part i will write i kinda got distracted when i was writing it lol
Pt3

The rest of the day went pretty fast mike was in most of Trè’s classes but Trè was only with Lucy in French and music so they didn’t see each other until lunch were they sat together just the two of them gazing into each others eyes until mike came over and said “um do you mind if I sit wd you guys” Trè and Lucy suddenly snapped out of there trance and replied “um yer sure”. “So what you guys got next then?” Trè asked “English” Lucy and Mike said together “omg really finally not on my own in English lol”. “Trè did you say you were in a band what’s it called” Trè wasn’t listening until he heard band which is when he shouted “shit” Lucy and Mike looked confused so Trè explained that he had band practise after school and he had only just remembered. Just as the bell rang Trè goes “oh my bands called the lookouts You two should come and watch the practise tonight ill pick you both up around 7” “um yer sure that sounds good” Lucy replied “yer ok but you don’t know were I live do you” mike asked “um no but you can tell me” Trè said “oh I live at number 61 Adeline street” “omg really I live like next door but one I live at number 59” Lucy jumped in “ill come nock on you door at quarter to 7 then so Trè don’t have to wait for the both of us” Lucy suggested “um yer sure”. Trè walked of to maths and left Mike and Lucy talking as they walked to English.

As the lesson drew to an end miss Ferrell stopped the class so they could read out the stories they should have written but Lucy and mike got so distracted they had only managed a paragraph between them so when miss Ferrell asked to hear Lucy’s she grabbed mikes book and combined the stories and they had both written about bands so the story didn’t sound that bad but miss Ferrell new that it wasn’t just Lucy’s story so she asked to hear mikes Lucy looked at mike worried but he made a story up there and then about how a boy and girl met while in music Lucy discovered it wasn’t actually a story and everything mike said had happened that day. When the lesson had finished Lucy and mike walked out of school together and walked home as the got to there part of Adeline Street Lucy looked at mike and said “ill see you at quarter to 7” They both went there separate ways as Lucy stepped in here house the phone started ringing she answered “Hello”

Trè point of view
“Hi Lucy its Trè”
“How the fuck did you get my number?”
“Um you know them girls you were sitting next to in music well they were in my maths group so I asked them anyway that’s beside the point why did you wait for me after school?”
“shit sorry Trè me and mike were talking about the music we listen to and I guess we just got distracted im really sorry can I still come to your band practise, oh im doing puppy dog eyes at the moment just so you no”
“Oh ok and it’s alright and yes you can still come ill pick you up from mikes and 7”
“Ok then bye”
Trè heard the click of Lucy putting the phone and sat down in his living room he thought about going on his drums for some last minute practise but then just drifted asleep His phone went of at around 6.30 he answered it and Lucy was on the other end “hey Trè you are still coming right I just didn’t want you to forget”
“Of course I am Lucy and thank god you rang me becuz I feel asleep and how did you get my number?” “oh well you were the only person that rang my house phone so I just redialled the number ok ill see you soon iv just got to grab my shoes and coat then im going over to mikes so ill see you there bye”
Then the click came again and Trè felt empty once again Trè stood for a few moments wondering how he could feel like this for Lucy when he had only met her that day “shit im gonna be late”, “language frank Edwin write the 3rd” “soz mum and iv got to go band practise see you later” “Frank you forgot your car keys you wont get anywhere without them” “omg thanks mum” Trè said taking the keys from his mum before running outside to his car when he got in his phone started ringing “hello mum im in the drive way why couldn’t you come outside” “well I thought you had already gone but I put some money in your car for you to get some dinner because your always late home from practise” “thanks mum but I got to go otherwise ill be late bye” Trè hung up and started up his car then backed out the drive way.

Lucy’s pt of view

Omg its only 25 to I wonder if mike would be ok if I turned up early it should only be a few minutes like cuz iv still got to walk over there. “Dad im going out bye”
I should have bought a jacket its actually cold out Lucy thought to her self oh ill be alright. Mikes house had a green door which was nearly has green as the perfectly looked after grass. As Lucy stepped up towards the door it opened and there stood mike “I saw you coming you about 5 minuets early but Trè just rang me and said he’s already on his way round so he wont be long um do you want a drink or anything”. Lucy looked around mikes house it was amazingly decorated just like her own home “Lucy Lucy you in there” “oh um yer soz um no im all good thanks what do your parents do like job wise” “oh um ma dads a solicitor and ma mums a lawyer what about yours” “wow that’s well good well my mum passed away but my dads a judge” “oh so you’re the judges daughter my dads always talking about” “What how does your dad know me” “ I don’t think he actually knows you but he was always saying I should hook up with the judges daughter who lives on this street so we could keep law in the family and I was like well the law gonna end straight away then cuz im not becoming a lawyer” “ha my dads like that last week he was all like how are your grades going you have to have good grades to get in law school and I felt like screaming”. All of a sudden there was a knock on the door it was Trè “yo you two ready to go or what” “yer im nearly ready wait two minuets” mike said as he disappeared up the stairs the reappeared with a pink Floyd hoodie which he handed to Lucy “you forgot a jacket and I don’t want you getting cold my dad will find a way of sowing me lol” “oh thanks I love pink Floyd I went to see them last time they were in Oakland” “oh I missed that concert my flipping parents decided to go visit my auntie in New York now put the hoodie on before we go outside my dads watching” Lucy put the hoodie on waved to mikes dad then they went outside up to Trè’s car Trè grabbed the passenger door and held it open for Lucy who got in and mike jumped in the back and they set off “so were you practising then” “just my mates garage but its got everything in and im not kidding he’s got the whole band equipment fridge full of food and booze and a giant sound system and a home cinema screen thing its totally awesome an I told him you were coming during maths” “your were texting during maths I bet you got in trouble” “no I dint text him I rang him when the teacher was out of the room” “omg Trè your well bad I can only just get away with listening to music let alone ringing someone” Lucy said.

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Pt 4
When they arrived at Trè‘s mates house a guy came running out “Trè we have a major problem with practise bassist couldn’t come” “oh its alright um mike you play bass right well we have all the tabs wrote down so just read them is that ok?” “Yer sure you wouldn’t have a bass I can borrow?” “Yer I told you they have a whole recording studio” “well all sorted then”
As the walked in to the garage Trè pointed out a sofa to Lucy and she went and sat on it. The garage was massive and as Trè had said they had a whole recording studio in it. As Lucy sat there and looked around someone sat down next to her so she turned around and as she did her lips touch someone else’s as she pulled a way to apologize she saw the same sea blue eyes staring back “sorry” she said “im not” Trè replied. Trè took Lucy’s hand and took her out of the garage and down the street a little to a gorgeous park we Trè lead her to a bench and sat her down and said “Lucy I really like you and like do you like yknow wanna go out with me” “yes I will Trè and for the book I really like you too”

About an hour passes when mike came running towards them “were the hell have you two been we have been looking everywhere for you come on like I need to get home” so Trè and Lucy got up and Trè grabbed Lucy’s hand “oh I see you two are a couple now then” “yer we are got a problem with that mike” Lucy bitched back “no god carm down I was only saying” mike replied.

Later that night

Mikes pov

He beat me I can’t believe it I really like her I really do mike thought to himself. Mike sat on his bed and put pink Floyd on his record player then he lay on his bed and drifted into a deep sleep.

Lucy’s pov

“Omg omg omg im going out with Trè whoop” Lucy said quietly to her self. “Ouch” Lucy shouted as she fell of her bed and hit the floor. “Ring, ring, ring ring” “SHIT wares my phone” Lucy found her phone and looked at the caller id it was Trè “hey” Lucy said “hey sexy what you doing” “hmmm I wonder what im doing oh yer im talking to you” “well do you wanna go for a walk I cant sleep ill drive to yours and leave my car at the end of your drive” “um yer sure ill have to escape threw my window though my parents are asleep lol” “ok ill be there in about 20 mins is that ok” “um yer sure im still dressed so yer that’s alright see you then” click Trè hung up and thee I was left alone in my room once more as i sat there thinking when I heard a car pull up out side it was Trè. I quickly grabbed the hoodie mike had lent me and climbed out of the window and walked along the roof to the trellis and climbed down as i neared the bottom i lost my footing and fell but Trè caught me and we both fell back laughing. we lay on the grass for half an hour laughing.

Mikes pov

I was suddernly woken by laughing as i looked out the window i saw two shadows on Lucy’s lawn. So I opened the window “ Can you two get a room or shut the fuck up please sum of the people on this street are sleeping” i shouted Lucy looked at me “sorry mike see you at school tomorrow” Lucy shouted back . I still can’t believe she chose him over me that’s just unfair oh well there’s always that girl in science.

Très pov
“ Lucy I best go we have school in the morning and I find it hard to get up any way but ill meet you at the bus stop in the morning” “Trè wait a minuet” As I turned around Lucy’s lips met mine but before i new it Lucy had pulled away “see you in the morning Trè” . I watched Lucy walk up to the trellis and then she disappeared in to her window. I slowly walked towards my car and got in. it was a quiet ride home until I reached my house when I opened the door there was my dad “hi dad” he turned to look at me “were the hell have you been frank? id understand if you had left a note like you usually do but no you didn’t so were have you been” “um sorry dad I was at a friends house well more in there garden but yer sorry im going bed anyway iv got school tomorrow”. As I walked up to my room I felt my phone go in my pocket it was Lucy “hey babes what’s up” “Trè can I come yours please” “yer sure ill come and get you” “thanks” she hung up I ran down stairs and grabbed my keys “dad a friends coming round and its for a series reason ill be back in around 10 minutes” “ok son but don’t forget your house key as well im going to bed” “ok night dad”. I ran out the door and jumped in my car as I neared Lucy’s house I started to wonder what was up I could tell she was crying on the phone but why?.

Lucy’s pov

As I climbed into my window I was grabbed by the arm “were the fuck have you been Lucy you little git you supposed to stay in your room at night not go wondering out your window” it was my dad I thought he was asleep but he wasn’t he was in the living room drinking which means something bads happened “dad im sorry” “sure you are your mum leaves me and you thought you would to yer that’s what I thought no get out my fucking house pack your stuff and go” As I turned he grabbed my arm again and turned me round and punched me in the face as he did this I fell to the ground. When I had finally got round to standing up he had gone so I grabbed my phone out of my pocket and dialled the last person to ring me which happened to be Trè. It took him a while to answer but when he did I asked him to come and get me and as soon as he said yes I grabbed my school bag and overnight bag and packed it with the things I would need for tonight and tomorrow morning. I decided to go out the window again I didn’t really want to face my dad again. As I got to the sidewalk I felt something drip down my face I wiped my hand over were it came from and looked at my hand all I could see was red. The bastarded must have hit me with his fucking ring I fell down and started crying. All of a sudden I heard car pull up to the kerb and a door shut before I new it somebody had there arm round me it was Trè.

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Pt 5
Before I knew it we had arrived at Trè I couldn’t move I felt so sore all of a sudden the car door pen and I was lifted out of the car that’s when the smell of blood hit me and I collapsed to the sound of a heart beat. When I awoke I found my self asleep in a comfy bed as I opened my eyes and looked around I could see plenty of posters mainly pink Floyd so I was guessing this was Trè’s room but were was he. I got up and got dress then did my make up and went down stairs and there was Trè making coffee “do you want a cup before school” Trè asked “um yer sure I want milk through im not a weirdo like you” I looked at Trè and stuck my tongue out that’s when it hit me literally my head started hurting again when I turned around I had discovered mike was there and he had threw a cushion at my head “ouch you twat iv still got a headache from the performance last night” “oh soz lu I forgot about that” “oh god you already got a nick name for me wat am I gonna call u mikey there you got I got a new name for you” “what about me” Trè jumped on my toe accidently so I tried not to scream “ ouch any way Trè you already have a nickname other wise I would call you frank” “oh god please don’t but as if you call your kid frank its like as if” “Trè shut up we’ve got to get to school”

Sometime later

I decided to walk the long way to music to be most honest I couldn’t be bothered with it but even going the long way I was there first oh wait no I wasn’t there was a tall dark haired green eyed boy all ready there Id never seen him before so he must be the new guy who’s coming in our group so I decided I best go say hi “um hi im Lucy you must be the new lad you are in my group by the way” the boy was quiet for a bit I wondered why then I discovered he seemed lost in my eyes I laughed and turned away then he shook his head and spoke “um hi yer I am, im Billie Joe and cool you seem a nice person” “oh um thanks and the rest of the group will be waaaa Trè put me down now!!!!!!!!!!!” Trè put me down “Billie this is Trè and this is Mike” “hi so like what song are we doing?” Billie asked as he pulled out the most gorgeous guitar of all time I stood staring at it until Billie said “I see you like my guitar ill introduce you this is Blue he is a fender strat my dad gave him to me” I was still staring when before I new it “can I hold him” slipped out my mouth “um yer sure just don’t drop him he means a lot to me after my dad pasted away” Billie Joe handed me his guitar and as I sat there strumming along to Pink Floyd the wall the teacher came in and said “ settle down” after the register had been done we were sent to the practise rooms to get on with our performance piece when we got in the room I turned to Billie who was still staring at me “um do you wannna play lead or rhythm and to tell you now your singing” “um is it all right if I play lead and ok but im not very good at singing” Billie replied with a lack of confidence. “Oh we’re doing Elvis Costello Alison by the way” I quickly added “oh ok lucky I know that one then” “1, 2 and 1,2,3,4 hit it” Trè shouted from behind the drum kit. “Oh it's so funny to be seeing you after so long, girl. And with the way you look I understand…” as Billie Joe started singing I got lost in his voice it was so beautiful im surprised I managed to continue playing before I new it Billie was singing the last verse “Alison, I know this world is killing you.
Oh, Alison, my aim is true. My aim is true.”
“Billie Joe I thought you said you couldn’t sing you were amazing” I shouted in his face “no im not anyway this lessons nearly over and I don’t really wanna go French you guys up for skiving” “hmm I don’t know I don’t really wanna get in shit at home again especially after last night” “well im up for it and Lucy my mum said you can stay at mine until everything sorted with your mum and dad” Trè jumped in “ Lucy I swear you told me your mum was dead” mike questioned “I wish she was im sorry I said that she might as well be though I haven’t seen her in ages and Trè ill stick with you so were we gonna go” “um I dunno we will find some were firstly how do we get out” Billie added. “There’s a window in the end practise room Billie go distract the teacher and us lot will make an escape then you can say you left something in there” I said “yer good idea see you guys in about 5 mins ok”

[riis4eto]

OK, your story is... tres cool!
But there are some spelling mistakes.
1. You sometimes write names with small letter, but I do it sometimes too, so I understand.
2. Sometimes you write "I" with small letter. Ya' know, if you write the story on MS Word and you have3 the spell check on, you won't have that problem.
3. Some places you have space instead of '
I guess there may be more, but that are basic things, that you better edit.

Ya' know, my main character's name is Lucy too. XD

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to be honest i cant spell and i also dont care that i cant

[Rayne]

The bad grammar is a little distracting, but the story itself is great.

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oh fair dose lol and thanks i might get around to the next part soon xx